Josephina Louise Baker! were where you this morning, its a Saturday you know we always have chores on Saturdays, now the entire bakerie is slow because of You! if i find out you were waisting your time waiting for that price to go on his weekly "greeting" of the people you will be in so much trouble! watch to kids for the rest of the day and no spending time with Daniella today!
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your irritated father!
And there he goes again personally trying to ruin my life i just wish that he could understand me. urrgh now i am stuck at home changing diapers and watching my "lovable" siblings.
Meggie I thought that your idea is great and I love how you put the first paragraph as a letter its very creative also it seems like you know exactly what your story is going to be so thats realy good and it seems like you will be able to put a lot of dialouge in your story finnaly i like how you put signed your irritated father.I dont have any questions besides what is going to happen at the ball or dance.the biggest thing you need to work on would be proof reading especially on spelling and capitalizing letters were they need to be capitalized.every thing else is good exept you should watch out for putting in someone on a phoe or computer or something even though you have not yet.
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